Tuesday, January 17, 2012

Short Story

Hello my name is Jerry I am a mouse. It has been very cold around here and this white stuff is falling on the ground and its fluffy and very cold. I have been trying to find a warm place to have a home but almost every alien house as a trap and hard to avoid them I saw my cousin killed by one it was very sad. I think I found a alien house to live the alien is wrinkly and has a cane but so far this house has been very warm and has no traps. I think this alien needs a name and I am going to name him Mr.Nice Guy yea that sounds good. Now I just need to find some friends in this house I found lots of food in this House and I think Mr Nice Guy saw me and the alien just walked away. ( 1 day later) I made it through day one and found some more food, now today I have to find a family. As I turn the corner I see a big colony of mice I got really happy so I ran to the nearest mouse I could find and I asked him if I could join his colony and he said why not and he introduced me to all the other mice. I think this colony is actually nice and I could stay with them for the rest my life, I hope.

1 comment:

  1. Very good post and POV but you have some typo's in you writing. For example in the second sentence you wrote "as" instead of "has" in the third sentence it should be "an" instead of "a". Other than that great story <3 <3 <3 <3

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